OPENING THOUGHTS

This is a really fun and enjoyable read. The concept is smart and excites us right from the beginning. There’s the fact that so many of us suffer from student debt, and that makes the story highly relatable right off the bat. The story features a great cat and mouse game. Keith is actively hunting Chas, and that is exciting to watch and keeps the stakes high. Funnily enough, Keith is also running out of time to make a payment, adding another layer of stakes to the story.

The script is already in great shape, and the story works so well. There aren’t any major adjustment needed. My notes will focus on some smaller details, but all in all, the script works as it is. It’s an easy read, the pages fly by fast, and the script looks professional.

PLOT

The plot is well crafted and already works extremely well. The setup is simple but effective. Chas ha never made a payment on his student loan, and Keith is tasked with collecting the payments. Keith’s methods are unethical, and he ends up getting fired. But, he is also under money pressure and needs to make a payment, and his only option for getting money is Chas.

Chas falls in love with Christie and pretends to be a doctor. This gives Chas so many problems and issues at the same, making the stakes high and the story exciting. The constant chase keeps us on our toes, and we don’t dare to look away from the story. Chas’s con threatens to blow up at any second, and the tension that comes from this is just wonderful. There are a lot of moments where he almost gets caught but gets another chance.